News submission and presentation 4/21

[18:01] Mi Shinn: so why don't you be the first presenter?
[18:02] Mi Shinn: phoebe?
[18:02] Phoebe Isenia: ok~
[18:02] Mi Shinn: 10 min
[18:03] Mi Shinn: you changed the layout and color of your poster
[18:03] Phoebe Isenia: let me check my poster for a while please
[18:03] Mi Shinn: cool
[18:03] Phoebe Isenia: yes
[18:03] Phoebe Isenia: I updated it yesterday
[18:03] Roxanne Kristan上线了。
[18:04] Mi Shinn: 1-3 sentences t osummarize your news
[18:04] Phoebe Isenia: My news is about the story of the snack street in NCU.
[18:05] Phoebe Isenia: and I introduce the development of the street and how students in NCU regard th street.
[18:05] Phoebe Isenia: Also, I mention the role of the snack street nowadays in NCU.
[18:06] Phoebe Isenia: it's a little bit long~ so it will take you some time reading it
[18:06] Mi Shinn: questions AND COMMENTS FROM AUDIENCES
[18:06] Mi Shinn: Judy?
[18:06] Mi Shinn: do you have questions?
[18:06] ko525252 Shelter上线了。
[18:07] Judy Meiler: i'm still thinking now
[18:07] Mi Shinn: ruby
[18:07] Mi Shinn: roxanne
[18:07] Mi Shinn: susie
[18:07] Mi Shinn: ding
[18:07] Mi Shinn: hello
[18:08] Roxanne Kristan: i'm still reading
[18:08] Mi Shinn: questions?
[18:08] Mi Shinn: comments ?
[18:08] Ding Atolia: still reading, sorry
[18:09] Susie223 Chun: I think you can show us some examples about how the students show their creativity in the snack street
[18:09] Mi Shinn: for example?
[18:10] Phoebe Isenia: I used to have a sentence to describe how students distrubute and speak out their slogans in front of the street.
[18:10] Phoebe Isenia: but i delete it, becasue i'm afraid that my article is too long and i don't think the desrcription is important in the article
[18:10] Susie223 Chun: Well, I make this comment because I don't know much about their creativity which was shown in the street
[18:11] Phoebe Isenia: ok~ i see. so the paragraph confused you?
[18:11] Mi Shinn: hi ko
[18:11] Roxanne Kristan: i think you can add lately phenomenon such like vendor selling shirts and that can support the creativity
[18:11] Susie223 Chun: a little bit,haha
[18:11] Phoebe Isenia: ok~ thank you~
[18:12] Ding Atolia: I find your piece of story interesting to read, phoebe
[18:12] Meimeiryo Littlebird: but that vendor doesn't come too oftenXD
[18:12] Judy Meiler: but I think Phoebe's news is clear enough now, dosen't need to be too long and complicated.
[18:12] Roxanne Kristan: not that often
[18:12] Phoebe Isenia: and reply to Roxanne. but don't you think those T shirt vendors is included in "various street vendore"
[18:13] Ding Atolia: I agree with Judy, I think it's a nice story
[18:13] Phoebe Isenia: i am not sure whether i should repeat it in the article or not
[18:13] Phoebe Isenia: and thank u~ Ding
[18:13] Ding Atolia: u r welcome
[18:13] Roxanne Kristan: depend on you maybe not
[18:13] Judy Meiler: maybe you can add some video about it, if you can find.
[18:13] Phoebe Isenia: oh that's a good suggestion!
[18:14] ko525252 Shelter下线了。
[18:14] Judy Meiler: thanks!
[18:14] Mi Shinn: ok
[18:14] Mi Shinn: thanks phoebe
[18:14] Ding Atolia: haha, vedios about the delicious food, that's attractive
[18:14] Mi Shinn: nice news!
[18:14] Phoebe Isenia: thank you~ Emma
[18:14] Mi Shinn: lanyu next time
[18:15] Phoebe Isenia: hahaha

The Mecca in NCU? Do you visit it today? FINAL DRAFT

The Mecca in NCU? Do you visit it today?
The significance of The Food Street in NCU.



What is the most frequently-visited place for a college student in NCU? The library? The classroom? Certainly not. It’s a place where thousands of students make pilgrimages every day. When all of the students move toward one direction and swarm into a four-meter-wide street during lunch time, the answer simply shows up.


This 100-meter-long street in NCU is known as “The Snack Street” or “Xiao-Ye Street”, where student can resort to after a bombardment of several hours’ stifling classes. Since the food in student restaurants are usually considered choiceless, tasteless, and invariable, the snack street has become a central kitchen in NCU.


The Snack Street has existed for more than thirty years. It has been expanded from a few stores up to over 40 stores now. Along the snack street, there are various food stands, restaurants, copy stores, convenient stores, pool-rooms, and so on. According to Percy Kuo, a professor who graduated from NCU and returned for teaching now, “there were only a few stores and food stands when I was a college student thirty years ago, not like the prosperous sights of what it is now.”



Compared with other colleges where there are bustling night markets or prosperous shopping areas around, students in NCU sometimes complain about the relative deficiency of it. However, Tina, a junior who now live in mainland China as an exchange student, misses it very much, “I used to get bored with the food there, but I come to realize that the street represents the eating style of Taiwanese. You can have all kinds of local and exotic food there! I am missing the food and the people on the snack street.”


Students in NCU have long described themselves as “hermits on the hill’ because of the isolation of the school. However, the snack street is also an arena where student can propagandize their activities in addition to supplying students with daily needs. During lunch time, when stream of students invade in, the street heartily spread out its strength. “It’s like a lively and vigorous market. The snack street offers students a place to show their energy and creativity. I especially love the atmosphere when groups of students strive for promoting their activities.” said Michael, a graduate who recalled the scene of the vivacity with a smile.



The snack street becomes a flowing stream which is loaded with a great deal of memories. Thinking of the snack street, lots of emotions and images emerge from one’s mind. “My love for the snack street will never fade out!” said Professor Kuo. Without a doubt, the street will keep on creating and recording more and more stories for all of the students in NCU.

Group discussion in SL 1st

This is the extra meeting of our group after the class, because we haven't finished our 1st discussion in SL~

[2:36] ko525252 Shelter: so let's discuss Quill's?
[2:36] Charlotte Mohegan: ok
[2:37] Phoebe Isenia: oh it doesn't work
[2:37] Phoebe Isenia: how to invite friends?
[2:38] Phoebe Isenia: anyway we browse the news first
[2:38] Charlotte Mohegan: I think the use of words are beautiful in Quill's article
[2:38] Phoebe Isenia: roxanne says that her computer is broken she'll join us later
[2:38] Phoebe Isenia: oh really? thank you
[2:38] ko525252 Shelter: I agree with Charlotte
[2:38] Charlotte Mohegan: however I have a little confuse about your topic
[2:39] Phoebe Isenia: yes speak
[2:39] Charlotte Mohegan: is it about flying fish festival
[2:39] ko525252 Shelter: Your words did paint a vivid picture for me
[2:39] Phoebe Isenia: oh thanks for that ocean
[2:39] Charlotte Mohegan: or the Tao tribe's tradition
[2:40] Charlotte Mohegan: that's what I confused
[2:40] Phoebe Isenia: umm yes it's about the flying fish festival of the Tao tribe
[2:40] Phoebe Isenia: the importance of the flying festival
[2:40] Phoebe Isenia: for them
[2:40] Phoebe Isenia: flying fish festival*
[2:41] ko525252 Shelter: I could see the festival in my mind~
[2:41] Charlotte Mohegan: oh I see
[2:41] ko525252 Shelter: OH~
[2:41] Roxanne Kristan is Online
[2:41] Charlotte Mohegan: I misunderstand the last three sentences
[2:41] Phoebe Isenia: did my article not show the theme that i want to present?
[2:41] Charlotte Mohegan: and now there's no problem~
[2:41] ko525252 Shelter: COOL!
[2:42] Roxanne Kristan: i'm back
[2:42] ko525252 Shelter: but I have only one recommendation~
[2:42] ko525252 Shelter: other than that
[2:42] Phoebe Isenia: ok~ i'm all ears
[2:42] ko525252 Shelter: It's Perfect!!
[2:43] ko525252 Shelter: the recommendation:perhaps the ending could be more provocative~
[2:43] Phoebe Isenia: ohh isee
[2:43] ko525252 Shelter: more creative~
[2:43] Roxanne Kristan: whose news is being discussed now
[2:43] Phoebe Isenia: coz i haven't finished my news
[2:43] Phoebe Isenia: mine~
[2:43] Roxanne Kristan: ok
[2:43] ko525252 Shelter: great~!
[2:44] Phoebe Isenia: maybe we can move on~~ to next person~

The Mecca in NCU? Did you visit it today? 2nd draft

The Mecca in NCU? Did you visit it today?
-The significance of The Snack Street in NCU.



What is the most frequently-visited place for a college student in NCU? The library? The classroom? Certainly not. It’s a place where thousands of students make pilgrimages every day. When all of the students move toward one direction and swarm into a four-meter-wide street during lunch time, the answer simply shows up.


This 100-meter-long street in NCU is known as “The Snack Street” or “Xiao-Ye Street”, where student can resort to after a bombardment of several hours’ stifling classes. Since the food in student restaurants are usually considered choiceless, tasteless, and invariable, the snack street has become a central kitchen in NCU.


The Snack Street has existed for more than thirty years. It has been expanded from a few stores up to over 40 stores now. Along the snack street, there are various food stands, restaurants, copy stores, convenient stores, pool-rooms, and so on. According to Percy Kuo, a professor who graduated from NCU and returned for teaching now, “there were only a few stores and food stands when I was a college student thirty years ago, not like the prosperous sights of what it is now.”



Compared with other colleges where there are bustling night markets or prosperous shopping areas around, students in NCU sometimes complain about the relative deficiency of it. However, Tina, a junior who now live in mainland China as an exchange student, misses it very much, “I used to get bored with the food there, but I come to realize that the street represents the eating style of Taiwanese. You can have all kinds of local and exotic food there! I am missing the food and the people on The Snack Street.”


Students in NCU have long described themselves as “hermits on the hill’ because of the isolation of the school. However, the Snack Street is also an arena where student can propagandize their activities in addition to supplying students with daily needs. Students always wait in a line in front of the gate of the street to speak out loud their slogans or to distribute their fliers in order to seize the chance. During lunch time, when stream of students invade in, the street heartily spread out its strength. “It’s like a lively and vigorous market. The Food Street offers students a place to show their energy and creativity. I especially love the atmosphere when groups of students strive for promoting their activities.” said Michael, a graduate who recalled the scene of the vivacity with a smile.



The Snack Street becomes a flowing stream which is loaded with a great deal of memories. Thinking of The Food Street, lots of emotions and images will emerge from one’s mind. “My love for The Food Street will never fade out!” said Professor Kuo. Without a doubt, the street will keep on creating and recording more and more stories for all of the students in NCU.

Group discussion in SL 2nd in class

(1) the dialogue
[20:43] Phoebe Isenia: i haven't finished my article
[20:43] Phoebe Isenia: i just made a pause becoz it's 200 words already
[20:43] Phoebe Isenia: as a result i haven't had a complete conclusion
[20:44] JTA Karsin: sorry
[20:45] Aleli Damiano is Offline
[20:45] ko525252 Shelter: yes?
[20:45] Charlotte Mohegan: I think you have to delete some words or that will more than 200 words
[20:45] ko525252 Shelter: that's OK~
[20:46] ko525252 Shelter: yes~
[20:46] Charlotte Mohegan: to let it more briefly
[20:46] Charlotte Mohegan: but it's a tough task to introduce something else
[20:46] Phoebe Isenia: so our news story can't be more than 200 words?
[20:46] ko525252 Shelter: I recommend to end with some kind of question~
[20:47] ko525252 Shelter: or something that would shock the readers
[20:47] Roxanne Kristan: minium of 200
[20:47] Charlotte Mohegan: oh sorry the minimum is 200words
[20:47] Charlotte Mohegan: yes so it's ok
[20:47] ko525252 Shelter: OH MY
[20:47] Phoebe Isenia: oh i see
[20:47] Charlotte Mohegan: yeah
[20:47] ko525252 Shelter: yes~
[20:47] Phoebe Isenia: oh really?
[20:47] Phoebe Isenia: so i can write more?
[20:47] Phoebe Isenia: okay~
[20:48] Charlotte Mohegan: I think you can add the importance of having this tradition
[20:48] ko525252 Shelter: perhaps u can add some Avatar factor~
[20:48] Phoebe Isenia: i'll add some more description about the tradition and taboos of Tao people
[20:48] Charlotte Mohegan: from Taiwan's perspective or from other tribes's view
[20:48] Charlotte Mohegan: cool!!!
[20:48] Phoebe Isenia: what does Avatar factor mean?
[20:48] Charlotte Mohegan: you can compare tow of them
[20:49] ko525252 Shelter: like their environment gets polluted and that this tradition is endangered
[20:49] Charlotte Mohegan: two*
[20:49] ko525252 Shelter: something like that~
[20:49] Phoebe Isenia: oh~ i see
[20:49] Charlotte Mohegan: they both live with nature with great respect
[20:49] ko525252 Shelter: yes~
[20:49] Phoebe Isenia: but that will divert from my news?
[20:49] Charlotte Mohegan: and it not only happen in movie but reality
[20:49] Phoebe Isenia: cause what i focus is the splendid culture of tao tribe
[20:50] Phoebe Isenia: if i add some environmental issues such as you mention
[20:50] Phoebe Isenia: that will be another long article
[20:50] Judy Meiler is Offline
[20:50] ko525252 Shelter: perhaps u can just mention that on the side
[20:50] Meimeiryo Littlebird is Offline
[20:50] Phoebe Isenia: ok~ that's a good idea~ thank you
[20:51] Charlotte Mohegan: or you can only mention aobut the sameness of them
[20:51] ko525252 Shelter: thanks~
[20:51] Phoebe Isenia: what sameness?
[20:51] Charlotte Mohegan: I already said before
[20:51] Phoebe Isenia: sorry i miss it
[20:52] Charlotte Mohegan: hey both live with nature with great respect
[20:52] Charlotte Mohegan: it;s ok
[20:52] ko525252 Shelter: u can draw a parallel with the film
[20:52] Phoebe Isenia: oh... but i'm afraid that my news story would become a topic such as the Acatar project in taiwan
[20:52] Phoebe Isenia: Avatar*
[20:53] Charlotte Mohegan: I think maybe people are know more about Avatar rather Tao
[20:53] Phoebe Isenia: haha
[20:53] Phoebe Isenia: okay
[20:53] Charlotte Mohegan: so you can let them have a more vivid imagination
[20:53] ko525252 Shelter: perhaps u can describe the tribe as "the avatae of TW"
[20:53] Phoebe Isenia: yes that's a helpful suggestion
[20:53] Phoebe Isenia: hahaha
[20:54] Phoebe Isenia: alright
[20:54] ko525252 Shelter: so that it would draw people in
[20:54] Phoebe Isenia: anything else?
[20:54] Roxanne Kristan: and add some pictures
[20:54] Phoebe Isenia: thank you so much
[20:54] ko525252 Shelter: good idea!!


(2) a summary of the reader’s and the editor's SUGGESTED REVISIONS
The editor and the reader suggest the writer to add some factors of the movie “Avatar” into the article. There are some similarities of both, for example, they respect nature a lot, and protect the environment as much as they can do. By comparing the Tao tribe and Avatar together, readers will be more interested in the issue. After all, people are more familiar with Avatar than Tao tribe.
(3) a brief comment on the entire article with respect to organization, length, logic, and style.
The organizer suggests that in the end of the article, the writer could raise a constructive and reflective question to readers. This may impress the readers and make the article even more meaningful. Besides, they also encourage the writer to write something more specific to introduce the culture and traditions of the Tao tribe. Because in the article, it seems that the writer only mentions the vague importance of Tao culture without details. If the writer could add some vivid pictures and traditions of Tao tribe, then the article will be more interesting.

The story of The Food Street in NCU. 1st draft

The Mecca in NCU? Do you visit it today?
The story of The Food Street in NCU.




What is the most frequent-visited place for a college student in NCU? The library? The classroom? Certainly not. When all of the students move toward one direction and swarm into a four-meter width street during the lunch time, the answer will simply show up. Different from many other colleges, which are surrounded by bustling and prosperous shopping areas, there merely has a 100-meter-long street in NCU, which is called “The Food Street” or “Xiao-Ye Street”. It provides students with not only various food stands and restaurants, but all kinds of services, including copy stores, convenient stores, pool-rooms, and so on. For students in NCU, it’s a place where they can resort to after a bombardment of several hours’ stifling classes.


The Food Street has existed for more than thirty years. With the time, the Food Street has greatly thrived. At the first, there were only a few stores; however, it was springing up to over 40 stores nowadays. The growing of The Food Street not only shows its important role, but the changing attitude of eating for college students in NCU. Since the food in student restaurants are usually considered “choiceless, tasteless and invariable”, the street has become a central kitchen in NCU.



In addition to supplying students with daily needs, The Food Street functions as a platform which students can propagandize their activities. Even though students in NCU have long described them as “hermits on the hill”, The Food Street is like an arena which enables student to show their liveliness. Different clubs and activities would show up in a line in front of the gate of the street, in order to seize the chance when stream of people invade in. Some will speak out loud their slogans, and some will distribute their advertisements. In the lunch time, the street heartily spread out its maximum strength. “It’s like a lively and vigorous market. The Food Street offers students a place to show their energy and creativity. I especially love the atmosphere when groups of students strive for promoting their activities.” said Michael, a graduate who recalled the scene of the vivacity with a smile.


Comparing The Food Street with other colleges where have night markets around, students in NCU sometimes complain about the deficiency of it. Nevertheless, the emotions for The Food Street are complicated for students in NCU. Tina, a junior who was now exchanging to mainland China, expressed her miss after leaving NCU for over two months, “I used to get bored with the food there, but soon I realized that the street is the essence which represents the eating style of Taiwanese. You can have all kinds of local and exotic food there. And now, I am missing the food and the people in The Food Street.”



The Food Street becomes a flowing stream which is loaded with a great deal of memories. Thinking of The Food Street, lots of emotions and images will emerge from one’s mind. Without a doubt, the street will keep on creating and recording more and more stories for all of the students in NCU.