A Palace in Second Life for Environmental Consciousness-3rd draft

A Palace in Second Life for Environmental Consciousness
Green Expo gives off sound for the earth



Can you imagine how devastating and influential a bottle of coke could be? Most of people are ignorant of the increasing consumption of fossil fuels, the threatening situation of rare animals, the destruction of the earth’s atmosphere, and so on. Green Expo is an environmental exposition in virtual reality which safeguards the earth. It is like a palace which provides users with an educational and knowledgeable access to understand the urgent predicament of the earth. Visiting the palace, you’ll have a clear sight of the worsening phenomenon that the earth is suffering from! (http://slurl.com/secondlife/OneClimate/119/117/600)













Green Expo is held by a prominent non-profit organization, OneClimate(http://www.oneclimate.net/), which aims at dealing with climate change. Displaying various analyses of environmental protection on OneClimate Island (http://slurl.com/secondlife/OneClimate/37/199/22), Green Expo is one of the great achievements which environmentalists have created.The exposition was forged during the 350.org Day of Climate Action (http://www.350.org/), an international campaign that's building a movement to unite the world around solutions to the climate crisis.


The purpose of the exposition is for boosting eco-friendliness. There are over 25 uniquely crafted exhibition booths from a huge variety of people and organizations, including different environmental issues such as soils, energy, sea, the atmosphere, and the welfare of human beings and animals. In addition, each booth offers the link of its official website. So if viewers are eager to learn more information about the organization or the research, they can click on the poster and browse the page.


One of the booths in Green Expo promoted the idea of how Coca-Cola becomes a murderer. The booth is demonstrated by Killer Coke which reveals the truth that coca-cola has drowned not only the environment but human rights in some developing countries such as India and Cambodia. The poster also connects with the website of Killer Coke (http://www.killercoke.org/index.htm), an organization aiming at holding campaigns to stop killer Coke.

Green Expo is a platform where each organization spreads out and shares its discovery of the world with second life players. Next time when you are bored with shopping, dancing, and chatting in second life, a visit to Green Expo will definitely refresh your standpoints about the earth and broaden your horizons.

2nd draft of Second Life NEWS

Environmental protection has become a popular issue all around the world. In second life, different people and organizations promote the idea of environmental protection without reservation. Green Expo is one of the great achievements which environmentalist have made in Second Life. Green expo displays various analysis of environmental protection on OneClimate Island. The exposition was forged during the 350.org Day of Climate Action (http://www.350.org/), an international campaign that's building a movement to unite the world around solutions to the climate crisis.


(Video clip of 350.org: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=s5kg1oOq9tY&feature=player_embedded)

Green Expo is held by a prominent non-profit organization, OneClimate (http://www.oneclimate.net/), which aims at dealing with climate change. As a result, the purpose of the exposition is for boosting eco-friendliness. There are over 25 uniquely crafted exhibition booths from a huge variety of people and organizations, different issues including not only soils, energy, sea, the atmosphere, but the welfare of human beings and animals which related to environmental issues.



Most of people are ignorant of the increasing consumption of fossil fuels, the threatening situation of rare animals, the destruction of the earth’s atmosphere, and so on. Can you imagine how devastating and influential a bottle of coke could be? Visiting Green Expo, and you’ll have a clear sight of the worsening phenomenon that the earth is suffering from.

May 5, Group Discussion

(1) the dialogue

[18:49] Charlotte Mohegan: http://charlottejournalistic.blogspot.com/
[18:50] Roxanne Kristan: this mine
[18:50] Roxanne Kristan: http://roxanne131.blogspot.com/
[18:50] Phoebe Isenia: http://quill616.blogspot.com/
[18:51] Charlotte Mohegan: wow
[18:51] Charlotte Mohegan: romantic scene
[18:51] Charlotte Mohegan: is that picture you took by yourself
[18:52] Charlotte Mohegan: maybe we could start from Quill's
[18:52] Charlotte Mohegan: haha no~
[18:53] Charlotte Mohegan: it won't
[18:53] Charlotte Mohegan: since ocean is not here we won't have the organizer
[18:53] Phoebe Isenia: becoz i would like to change my topic
[18:53] Charlotte Mohegan: I will be the reader first
[18:53] Phoebe Isenia: alright
[18:53] Charlotte Mohegan: why
[18:53] Phoebe Isenia: i think it's hard to write
[18:54] Phoebe Isenia: and u know i don't have much sense in this topic
[18:54] Charlotte Mohegan: that why you can explore
[18:55] Phoebe Isenia: i think maybe i can go to thailand's disco
[18:56] Phoebe Isenia: there must be many people who are interested in transgender
[18:56] Charlotte Mohegan: . One of the transgender group in Second life is called “”,
[18:56] Charlotte Mohegan: ....
[18:57] Charlotte Mohegan: yes I had seen the shopping mall which sell the part of man or woman 's body
[18:57] Phoebe Isenia: i join the group but i forgot the name
[18:57] Phoebe Isenia: don't you think my topic is hard to write
[18:57] Charlotte Mohegan: like breast and penis
[18:57] Phoebe Isenia: why do they sell that>?
[18:58] Charlotte Mohegan: then you can change your geder
[18:58] Roxanne Kristan: for money
[18:58] Charlotte Mohegan: gender*
[18:58] Charlotte Mohegan: yes you can put it on and become a rea transgender person
[18:58] Charlotte Mohegan: the shop is very common
[18:58] Phoebe Isenia: of course i know it's for money
[18:58] Phoebe Isenia: but why people buy them?
[18:58] Roxanne Kristan: i have met a transgender person
[18:59] Phoebe Isenia: how do you know that~?
[18:59] Roxanne Kristan: cus her girlfriend want
[18:59] Roxanne Kristan: that made her more man-like
[18:59] Charlotte Mohegan: cool
[18:59] Phoebe Isenia: but in SL people can change our sex if we like
[18:59] Phoebe Isenia: don't we
[18:59] Roxanne Kristan: she 's really handsome XD
[19:00] Phoebe Isenia: so i can't understand why they want to buy that
[19:00] Roxanne Kristan: btw there is no grammar error
[19:00] Roxanne Kristan: maybe we could speed up
[19:00] Roxanne Kristan: XD
[19:00] Charlotte Mohegan: do you mean that transgender person is a woman is SL but she pretend to be man
[19:01] Roxanne Kristan: yes
[19:01] Roxanne Kristan: she's a homosexual in SL
[19:01] Phoebe Isenia: oh
[19:01] Charlotte Mohegan: in the profile ,there is nothing write male or female
[19:01] Phoebe Isenia: but you can change your sex
[19:01] Charlotte Mohegan: by dressing
[19:01] Phoebe Isenia: which will have a different look
[19:02] Phoebe Isenia: yup
[19:02] Charlotte Mohegan: yes so that's why they need to buy those things
[19:02] Roxanne Kristan: but above her name it said transgerder man
[19:02] Phoebe Isenia: i have a strong desire of changing my topic
[19:02] Charlotte Mohegan: in SL transgender become very easily
[19:02] Phoebe Isenia: i;'m interested in the issue but i don't know how to write
[19:02] Roxanne Kristan: yes
[19:02] Roxanne Kristan: it's a hot topic here
[19:02] Charlotte Mohegan: ok maybe you need to think about it
[19:03] Phoebe Isenia: or you give me some advice
[19:03] Charlotte Mohegan: yes very interesting
[19:03] Roxanne Kristan: you can have lots of materials
[19:03] Roxanne Kristan: and met interesting people
[19:03] Charlotte Mohegan: Emma said everything in reality can happen
[19:03] Phoebe Isenia: what kind and how to use
[19:03] Charlotte Mohegan: so you can go to Tailkand
[19:03] Roxanne Kristan: you can search transger
[19:03] Charlotte Mohegan: yes just search
[19:03] Roxanne Kristan: transgender*
[19:04] Phoebe Isenia: and then? i don;t know what questions should i interview with them
[19:04] Charlotte Mohegan: you nees to meet people , then you can find something more interesting
[19:04] Roxanne Kristan: i think there will be many placed fro u to go
[19:04] Charlotte Mohegan: ask anything
[19:04] Charlotte Mohegan: first you have to make friends with them
[19:04] Phoebe Isenia: ok i'll think about it
[19:04] Roxanne Kristan: anyway i think it's an interesting topic
[19:04] Roxanne Kristan: : )
[19:04] Charlotte Mohegan: just like making friends with normal guy
[19:04] Phoebe Isenia: does it mean that i should stay in SL as long as possible
[19:05] Charlotte Mohegan: you need to stay a long enough time
[19:05] Charlotte Mohegan: Iｄｉｄ
[19:05] Charlotte Mohegan: it became more funny than I expect
[19:05] Charlotte Mohegan: funnier*
[19:05] Charlotte Mohegan: much fun*
[19:05] Phoebe Isenia: i can't stand that
[19:05] Roxanne Kristan: or you can hahaha
[19:05] Charlotte Mohegan: hhaha?
[19:05] Roxanne Kristan: delete ir you can
[19:06] Roxanne Kristan: nothing
[19:06] Phoebe Isenia: ok
[19:06] Charlotte Mohegan: that is becuase you haven't find ineteresting people
[19:06] Charlotte Mohegan: interesting*
[19:06] Phoebe Isenia: yes i only meet u in SL
[19:06] Phoebe Isenia: hahahahaha
[19:06] Roxanne Kristan: hahaha
[19:06] Charlotte Mohegan: sh-----
[19:06] Phoebe Isenia: lol
[19:06] Charlotte Mohegan: you will discove many beautiful place
[19:07] Phoebe Isenia: i'll look forward to it
[19:07] Charlotte Mohegan: maybe we 'll discuss after you finish it
[19:07] Charlotte Mohegan: thanks for Phoebe
[19:07] Charlotte Mohegan: anything else?
[19:08] Roxanne Kristan: nope
[19:08] Roxanne Kristan: bope
[19:08] Phoebe Isenia: thank you guys


(2) a summary of the reader’s and the editor's SUGGESTED REVISIONS
The reader and the editor suggested that the writer use more materials to support her article, such as a visit to Thailand or other places where transgenders may gather around. By doing this, the writer could interview with transgenders, and it will help her a lot! In addition, the reader and the edotor encourage the writer to interview with people in second life as more as possible, and this will inspire her thinking as well.


(3) a brief comment on the entire article with respect to organization, length, logic, and style.
There’s no big grammar mistake in the article at all, but the length is too short. As a result, the reader and the editor asked the writer to explore something more special and impressive in second life, so that she can have much more information to write about.

Transgenders in Second Life

Transgenders in Second Life

Second life has always provided users a platform to discover world’s mystery and meet all kinds of people with different nations, races, interests, cultural backgrounds, and what’s more, sexual orientation. There are many transgender groups in Second Life. No matter you are heterosexual, homosexual, or bisexual, you can explore the variety of gender and sex.

Transgender groups also offer an opportunity for users to think about the possibility of transforming one’s gender. In second life, people could change their sexes at will, but in reality, it’s difficult to realize this desire because of social values and morality. One of the transgender group in Second life is called “”, which enables people who are interested in transgender issues to have an open-minded outlet and embrace the idea of changing sexes.