May 5, Group Discussion

(1) the dialogue

[18:49] Charlotte Mohegan: http://charlottejournalistic.blogspot.com/
[18:50] Roxanne Kristan: this mine
[18:50] Roxanne Kristan: http://roxanne131.blogspot.com/
[18:50] Phoebe Isenia: http://quill616.blogspot.com/
[18:51] Charlotte Mohegan: wow
[18:51] Charlotte Mohegan: romantic scene
[18:51] Charlotte Mohegan: is that picture you took by yourself
[18:52] Charlotte Mohegan: maybe we could start from Quill's
[18:52] Charlotte Mohegan: haha no~
[18:53] Charlotte Mohegan: it won't
[18:53] Charlotte Mohegan: since ocean is not here we won't have the organizer
[18:53] Phoebe Isenia: becoz i would like to change my topic
[18:53] Charlotte Mohegan: I will be the reader first
[18:53] Phoebe Isenia: alright
[18:53] Charlotte Mohegan: why
[18:53] Phoebe Isenia: i think it's hard to write
[18:54] Phoebe Isenia: and u know i don't have much sense in this topic
[18:54] Charlotte Mohegan: that why you can explore
[18:55] Phoebe Isenia: i think maybe i can go to thailand's disco
[18:56] Phoebe Isenia: there must be many people who are interested in transgender
[18:56] Charlotte Mohegan: . One of the transgender group in Second life is called “”,
[18:56] Charlotte Mohegan: ....
[18:57] Charlotte Mohegan: yes I had seen the shopping mall which sell the part of man or woman 's body
[18:57] Phoebe Isenia: i join the group but i forgot the name
[18:57] Phoebe Isenia: don't you think my topic is hard to write
[18:57] Charlotte Mohegan: like breast and penis
[18:57] Phoebe Isenia: why do they sell that>?
[18:58] Charlotte Mohegan: then you can change your geder
[18:58] Roxanne Kristan: for money
[18:58] Charlotte Mohegan: gender*
[18:58] Charlotte Mohegan: yes you can put it on and become a rea transgender person
[18:58] Charlotte Mohegan: the shop is very common
[18:58] Phoebe Isenia: of course i know it's for money
[18:58] Phoebe Isenia: but why people buy them?
[18:58] Roxanne Kristan: i have met a transgender person
[18:59] Phoebe Isenia: how do you know that~?
[18:59] Roxanne Kristan: cus her girlfriend want
[18:59] Roxanne Kristan: that made her more man-like
[18:59] Charlotte Mohegan: cool
[18:59] Phoebe Isenia: but in SL people can change our sex if we like
[18:59] Phoebe Isenia: don't we
[18:59] Roxanne Kristan: she 's really handsome XD
[19:00] Phoebe Isenia: so i can't understand why they want to buy that
[19:00] Roxanne Kristan: btw there is no grammar error
[19:00] Roxanne Kristan: maybe we could speed up
[19:00] Roxanne Kristan: XD
[19:00] Charlotte Mohegan: do you mean that transgender person is a woman is SL but she pretend to be man
[19:01] Roxanne Kristan: yes
[19:01] Roxanne Kristan: she's a homosexual in SL
[19:01] Phoebe Isenia: oh
[19:01] Charlotte Mohegan: in the profile ,there is nothing write male or female
[19:01] Phoebe Isenia: but you can change your sex
[19:01] Charlotte Mohegan: by dressing
[19:01] Phoebe Isenia: which will have a different look
[19:02] Phoebe Isenia: yup
[19:02] Charlotte Mohegan: yes so that's why they need to buy those things
[19:02] Roxanne Kristan: but above her name it said transgerder man
[19:02] Phoebe Isenia: i have a strong desire of changing my topic
[19:02] Charlotte Mohegan: in SL transgender become very easily
[19:02] Phoebe Isenia: i;'m interested in the issue but i don't know how to write
[19:02] Roxanne Kristan: yes
[19:02] Roxanne Kristan: it's a hot topic here
[19:02] Charlotte Mohegan: ok maybe you need to think about it
[19:03] Phoebe Isenia: or you give me some advice
[19:03] Charlotte Mohegan: yes very interesting
[19:03] Roxanne Kristan: you can have lots of materials
[19:03] Roxanne Kristan: and met interesting people
[19:03] Charlotte Mohegan: Emma said everything in reality can happen
[19:03] Phoebe Isenia: what kind and how to use
[19:03] Charlotte Mohegan: so you can go to Tailkand
[19:03] Roxanne Kristan: you can search transger
[19:03] Charlotte Mohegan: yes just search
[19:03] Roxanne Kristan: transgender*
[19:04] Phoebe Isenia: and then? i don;t know what questions should i interview with them
[19:04] Charlotte Mohegan: you nees to meet people , then you can find something more interesting
[19:04] Roxanne Kristan: i think there will be many placed fro u to go
[19:04] Charlotte Mohegan: ask anything
[19:04] Charlotte Mohegan: first you have to make friends with them
[19:04] Phoebe Isenia: ok i'll think about it
[19:04] Roxanne Kristan: anyway i think it's an interesting topic
[19:04] Roxanne Kristan: : )
[19:04] Charlotte Mohegan: just like making friends with normal guy
[19:04] Phoebe Isenia: does it mean that i should stay in SL as long as possible
[19:05] Charlotte Mohegan: you need to stay a long enough time
[19:05] Charlotte Mohegan: Iｄｉｄ
[19:05] Charlotte Mohegan: it became more funny than I expect
[19:05] Charlotte Mohegan: funnier*
[19:05] Charlotte Mohegan: much fun*
[19:05] Phoebe Isenia: i can't stand that
[19:05] Roxanne Kristan: or you can hahaha
[19:05] Charlotte Mohegan: hhaha?
[19:05] Roxanne Kristan: delete ir you can
[19:06] Roxanne Kristan: nothing
[19:06] Phoebe Isenia: ok
[19:06] Charlotte Mohegan: that is becuase you haven't find ineteresting people
[19:06] Charlotte Mohegan: interesting*
[19:06] Phoebe Isenia: yes i only meet u in SL
[19:06] Phoebe Isenia: hahahahaha
[19:06] Roxanne Kristan: hahaha
[19:06] Charlotte Mohegan: sh-----
[19:06] Phoebe Isenia: lol
[19:06] Charlotte Mohegan: you will discove many beautiful place
[19:07] Phoebe Isenia: i'll look forward to it
[19:07] Charlotte Mohegan: maybe we 'll discuss after you finish it
[19:07] Charlotte Mohegan: thanks for Phoebe
[19:07] Charlotte Mohegan: anything else?
[19:08] Roxanne Kristan: nope
[19:08] Roxanne Kristan: bope
[19:08] Phoebe Isenia: thank you guys


(2) a summary of the reader’s and the editor's SUGGESTED REVISIONS
The reader and the editor suggested that the writer use more materials to support her article, such as a visit to Thailand or other places where transgenders may gather around. By doing this, the writer could interview with transgenders, and it will help her a lot! In addition, the reader and the edotor encourage the writer to interview with people in second life as more as possible, and this will inspire her thinking as well.


(3) a brief comment on the entire article with respect to organization, length, logic, and style.
There’s no big grammar mistake in the article at all, but the length is too short. As a result, the reader and the editor asked the writer to explore something more special and impressive in second life, so that she can have much more information to write about.